Monday, March 21, 2011

Short short, based on my up coming novel.

I found an incredible blog on the Internet called Rach Writes.  I think the reason I enjoyed it so much is because she had a writing prompt for a short short that involved goldfish.  I LOVE goldfish!  Maybe because they are orange?  Anyway, here is my take on that writing prompt (99 words, not counting title).

The characters in this short short, Sam and Mr. Bigalow, are from a novel I am currently writing.  I thought it would be neat to show an isolated moment of the two of them interacting.  This short short gave me a chance to see another side of Sam.  I am proud of him.  He can be kinda wussy sometimes.  Anyhow, here is my story.  BTW, I love feedback.



Escape!  The Magician and His Pet
The goldfish bowl teetered on the edge of the work bench.  Sam grasped the bowl and plunged his hand into the water.  The goldfish felt slimy in his hand.  Quickly, he dropped it into the potion.
Fireworks exploded.  Sam fell to the floor in a heap.
Mr. Bigalow heard the noise and ran into the room.  He kneeled by Sam’s side.
“Did you try another escape spell?  You do realize your spells will never work.  I’ll never let you leave me.”
Mr. Bigalow cast an enchantment and fixed everything.  Sam looked up.  The goldfish was back in the bowl. 
Update:  See the illustration for this story here!

17 comments:

  1. I think it's so interesting when people take the characters from their work and use them. It gives us all a glimpse into the minds of our fellow writers. Cool!

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  2. That is so creepy. I have to admit I laughed out loud when I read the part about him dropping the goldfish in the potion - even though I don't love violence against animals :P

    Mr. Bigalow is CREEEEPY.

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  3. Hey Rebecca *waves* lovely to meet you. And what an intriguing take on my Challenge :)

    Hugs,

    Rach

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  4. Very interesting- I'm glad no one was harmed- but yikes- trapped!

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  5. Nice to meet you and your blog, Rebecca! Nice magical take on the Challenge; I like the magic ones (mine's magic too). I can feel that squishy goldfish in his hand. :)

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  6. "...I'll never let you leave me." I hope Sam can escape!

    Nikki

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  7. Yikes! Mr. Bigalow sounds uber creepy! I am happy the goldfish was restored though. ;)

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  8. I love the spin on the "pet" connotation.

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  9. Love the two characters! I'd like to see what else happens to Sam...

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  10. Very interesting premise! The dynamic between these characters is intriguing. Well done!

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  11. This is a fantastic piece and very creative!

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  12. that was some potion!! like this

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  13. Nice story! Glad you entered the challenge!! Cheers!!

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  14. This is so fun! You convey so much - so many questions in the reader's mind in such a short piece. I think you can actually take out "Mr. Bigelow heard the noise," and say something like "Mr. Bigelow ran into the room," or "crashed into the room," or something like that. Telling us he heard the sound slows it down a litte. But anyway, terrific!

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  15. Poor Sam. Doomed to be a prisoner. I like what you did with your hundred words.

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  16. Hey Rebecca, just wanted to let you know that you've been shortlisted as one of the top 5 in the judging round! Congratulations :)

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  17. Hey, you've made it through to the final judging round! Good luck and congratulations :)

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